page critique

Thanks so much to susanivt for offering her page! I think this opening has a nice spirit to it, and I think it does a good job of kicking off the novel with a whimsical tone and a good sense of character. While beginning with someone waking up is a bit of a standard trope, […]

I’m back in the office after attending a lovely wedding in Amish country, who I don’t suppose are big readers of this blog. Ah well. What they lose in Bachelor references they gain in lack of Bachelor references. Time for Monday’s page critique! Refresher on how this works: – If you’re interested in submitting a […]

Thanks again to darylsedore for bravely offering the page. I think this is an interesting high concept beginning, and the page is able to build a suspenseful tone, which I enjoyed. The “bring hammer” part of the premonition was a great touch, and I really want to know why she’s under that bridge. My concerns […]

Time for Monday’s page critique! Refresher on how this works: – If you’re interested in submitting a page for a future critique, enter it in this thread in the Forums (and be sure and check out the directions in the first post). – I use a random number generator to select the winning critique. – […]

Thanks again to KRWriter for venturing the page and to everyone who has already entered their constructive advice. I like the idea of a character staring at Earth and feeling scared about what has happened there, which immediately opens up questions about what could have transpired. My main concern with this opening is that I […]

Time for Monday’s page critique! Refresher on how this works: – If you’re interested in submitting a page for a future critique, enter it in this thread in the Forums (and be sure and check out the directions in the first post).– I use a random number generator to select the winning critique.– Please please […]