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Dear Agent for a Day,
16-year old Noella, mechanic in the city of Beziers, daydreams of the ancient past when animals were more than legends, before the shields separated the cities from the radiation-tainted Wild. But when it’s discovered that Noella is the secret heir to a wealthy city called Alcanzar, she must escape a plot to force her into marriage with Etienne, the Prince of Beziers. She flees beyond the shields, to the mythical Wild, which hasn’t been destroyed as the city-dwellers are taught by Council-sponsored textbooks.
In the Wild, a camaraderie has evolved between humans known as the Timber and the animals that share their lands. One Timber, Lynx, teaches her to survive outside the shields where a new way of life for her and the people of Alcanzar beckons. But when soldiers from Beziers find her and bring her back to Etienne, Lynx breaks into the city to save her. Only problem is, Etienne isn’t the monster she feared. When he promises her a chance to help govern her own people, Noella isn’t so sure she wants to be rescued.
Noella must decide if she has the strength to become the true ruler of Alcanzar, and upset a system that has been teaching a lie for centuries.
Birthright is a 70,500 word YA novel. I am a publicist for a small publishing company, and managed the children’s section of an independent bookstore for eight years. I have two stories published in “Stories for Children Magazine.”
Thank you for considering my work for representation.
Sincerely,
Author
STATS: 24% request rate
rantonson17 says
Dear Author,
Thank your for your query. Unfortunately, I am unable to represent your work at this time.
Best of luck,
Rebekka
Bekkoni says
Dear Author,
THank you for your submisson. Unfortunately, I do not feel strongly enough about this story to represent it.
Best Wishes,
Bekkoni
Diana says
Dear Query #38:
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, this isn’t the right project for me.
Best wishes,
Diana
Flemmily says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately, I feel that BIRTHRIGHT is not a fit for our agency.
Best of luck with your future endeavors,
Flemmily
Perle_Rare says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission but this isn’t right for me at this time.
Best wishes,
Perle_Rare
Reason:
– I did not find the premise original though this story could interest others.
H. Zilionis says
Dear Author,
Thank you so much for sending me your query and offering me the chance to consider your work. Unfortunately, I am not the right agent for your project.
Good luck and keep writing!
Holly Z – Agent for a Day
Maria A says
Thank you for thinking of our agency, but not for us at this moment.
Best of luck,
Agent
TecZ aka Dalton C Teczon - Writer says
Dear Author:
I enjoyed receiving your query. I found your novel, “Birthright,” to be very enticing and I’d like you to send me the first five pages of your manuscript in the body of an e-mail? I’d be happy to take a look and let you know whether I’d be a good fit for the project.
Best regards,
Dalton C. Teczon – Agent
Davien says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission, but this is not for me. I wish you luck in finding a home for your manuscript.
All the best,
Nora Coon says
Not right for us at this time. Best of luck.
***
I like that she’s a mechanic, but most of the rest of the story sounds like it’s been done before. Secret identity? Forced marriage? What makes your story different?
(Also, why are humans named after trees and animals? Confusing)
Dana says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately I will have to pass. While I enjoyed your writing, I would have liked a little more information and a stronger voice in the writing. Good luck with your search.
Regards,
Dana
Reasons: more voice, more info, liked the concept though.
Chuck H. says
Dear Author,
Sorry to say this just didn’t grab me. Good luck in your search for representation.
Sincerely,
Chuck
(Theme is too familiar to me and I haven’t read a scifi novel in years. Logans Run comes to mind and Orphans of the Sky.)
Janine says
Thank you for your query, but I am not the right agent for this. Best of luck.
RainSplats says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately it’s not a good fit for me. Best of luck.
-Rain
(Well written. It just didn’t sing to me. Near miss)
Alisa says
No, thank you.
Alisa.
Joy says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission and your interest in using me as an agent. After taking some time to consider your material, I have decided that this isn’t right for me.
Best of luck in your writing endeavors,
Joy
Reasoning: The premise intrigued me, but I didn’t love it. I think it’s just a personal preference here.
Annie Reynolds says
Dear author
Thank you for taking the time to submit your query to the A.F. A.D. agency. Unfortunately I do not believe your novel is a good fit at this time, but please remember that this is a very subjective industry, so keep trying.
Good luck with your career.
Yours truly,
Annie Reynolds.
Shannon says
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting your query for BIRTHRIGHT for review. Unfortunately, I am not the right person to represent this story. This is a subjective business so another agent may feel differently. Good luck.
Sincerely,
Shannon
Cat Moleski says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. However, your work is not right for me. Good luck with your search for representation.
Cat
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I appreciate you sending in your work, but I don’t think its right for me.
Best of luck,
Keith Champaign
Aisling says
Dear Author,
I am sorry to inform you that I am not interested in your book. It does not fit with what I am looking for right now so I regret to tell you that, although I appreciated you sending me your query, I would not like to represent your work. I wish you the best of luck with your future writing!
Aisling
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I didn’t like it. Try again later.
Backdoor Trojan
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I’m sorry, but this story is not right for me. Thanks for sending me your request, I really appreciate it. Please continue writing.
Veronica Lovette
Anonymous says
Dear writer,
I appreciate the query but your book is not what I am looking for at the moment. However, I wish you luck in getting this book published.
Best regards,
Nathaniel Orange
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I appreciate your time and efforts, but I am sorry to say that I do not wish to represent your story. If you have another story idea, please send it to me in the future, and I would be happy to look at it.
Best Wishes,
Quintus Blackburn
Anonymous says
Dear writer,
I enjoyed your query, but I’m afraid I’m not the right agent to represent this work. I’d love to see more of your writing.
Gloria Valentine
Anonymous says
I appreciate you sending me this, but I’m going to pass.
S. Pancake
Anonymous says
Dear Pursuing Author,
After reviewing your query, I feel that what you have presented to us is just not going to fly in our market right now. Sorry but keep up the good work.
Sincerely,
Pepe Habanera
Mega says
I thank you for sending me your query but it isn’t right for me at this time.
-MV
ccallicotte4 says
Thank you for sending me your query for BOOK TITLE. I appreciate you considering me.
I reviewed your proposal and unfortunately am going to pass on representing it, as I feel I would not be the best agent to represent your work. Your query does sound intriguing, however, my list is nearly full and I’m having to be very selective in what I take on. Please keep in mind that this is a subjective business, and another agent may feel differently. I encourage you to query widely.
Best of luck to you.
{I’m having trouble at this point, as there are several good ones and I only have 2 choices left!}
Asherose says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. I would like to request the first three chapters at this time.
Agent
Reasoning: Excellent query. The blurb could maybe be condensed a little but it really held my interest. This story has good potential.
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
Thank you for the submission, but I regret to inform you that I will not be picking up your story.
Keep Writing,
Agent Jackie Moon
Anonymous says
Dear author,
I appreciate your query and found your concept interesting; however, it is just not what I am looking for. I look forward to future queries from you!
Thank you, Scarlett Cyrus
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I would very much like to thank you for submitting your query, unfortunately it’s not right for me.
Sincerely,
Agent Sunshine
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I have decided not to take up your offer on publishing this book. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to view your material.
Thank You,
Happy Gilmore
LateInTheGame says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I am not the best representative for your work.
Good luck in your search for representation.
All the best,
Agent LateInTheGame
Megan says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your time, but I will have to decline.
Best of luck,
Meg Spencer
drat says
Dear Author,
Thank you for sending me your query. I gave it careful consideration, but ultimately I concluded I’m not the right agent for the book.
Good luck with your manuscript, and query widely!
Thanks,
SDC
Gryph says
Dear Author,
Thank you very much for your query. While I appreciate the time and effort you’ve put into your work, I don’t believe this is a good fit for me.
Please remember that what doesn’t fit one agent may well fit another! I encourage you to not give up. In the future, if you have other manuscripts to query, I hope that you’ll think of me again.
Sincerely,
Agent Gryph
Kate H says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Please send me the first 30 pages and a brief synopsis.
Thank you,
Kate H
colleen rowan kosinski says
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I do not feel I am the right agent for your project. I encourage you to query other agents and wish you the best of luck.
Thank you,
Agent C
Anonymous says
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I do not feel I am the right agent for your project. I encourage you to query other agents and wish you the best of luck.
Thank you,
Agent C
Reba says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, it is not the right fit for me.
Best,
Reba
s.koncilja says
Dear Author,
I received and read your query. Unfortunately it is not something that I’m looking for at the moment.
Keep me informed about your future work and good luck!
Agent S.K.
Dorothy says
Dear Author:
Please send your chapter out line and the first 50 pages. I am interested in adding this YA fiction to my list if your writing sustains the theme and plot as well as the query indicates. You may be interested to know you work competed succefully against several YA queries today.
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I regret to inform you that I am not interested in representing your story. I hope you have better luck in the future.
Best of luck,
Arkham
Nifaerie Noven says
Hi,
Great concept. However, this is the sort of that may not go over well if it does not have the right voice. I need to know that the mood and the pace are perfect from the word go. Send me the first 1000 words and we’ll take it from there.
Best of luck.
superwench83 says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately, your manuscript isn’t right for me. Best wishes in your search for an agent.
Sincerely,
Agent for a Day
publishingcareer says
Dear Author
Thank you for your interest in our agency and submitting your query for your novel Birthright.
I read it with interest but unfortunately it is not what I am looking for.
Best of luck and kind regards.
Yours faithfully
Robert Sullivan AFAD
Nikki Hensley says
Dear Author:
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately, I don’t think I am the right agent for this novel. Best of luck in your search!
Agent Nikki