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Dear Agent for a Day,
Today, a bully broke a kid’s nose against a urinal; a rebel wrote her high school hit list; a sci-fi dweeb got caught with porn in class; and a social pariah got humiliated in the girls’ locker room.
Tomorrow, they’ll all be in deep trouble with no one to turn to but each other.
LOSERS is a 50,000 word young adult novel about isolation, friendship and discovering who we are through the people we connect with. Trapper, Andi, Boston and Tuna are four teens with nothing in common, until they witness a police officer committing a crime. Scared for their lives and caught up in the excitement, they hit the road until they can figure out who they can turn to for help. The novel takes place over a 24 hour period, and by the end, they learn exactly who they can count on – each other.
I wrote this novel because, while I never experienced death or drugs or other untold horrors in YA novels these days, I DID experience the daily abuse that can define a teenager at the most vulnerable time in their lives. I wanted to tell a story that every young adult can relate to.
As a journalist, I write facts all day, every day. This is my first work of fiction.
I would love to send a partial or full manuscript of Losers for your consideration.
Thanks in advance for your time.
Sincerely,
Author
STATS: 35% request rate
Sharon aka Sapphire says
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting a query letter for your manuscript Loser. I am rather intrigued by it and wished that you had included the first five pages as stipulated in my guidelines. Please submit, via email, the first five chapters of your manuscript pasted in the body of the letter.
Best wishes,
Sharon
Anonymous says
Love the voice. Request a review of your manuscript!
Agent C
gypsyscarlett says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query.
Unfortunately, your story is not right for me.
I wish you much luck finding a suitable agent.
NotJana says
Dear Author
Thank you for querying me. Although there are some potentially interesting elements presents, I am afraid this is not the right project for me at this time.
All the best,
Agent For A Day (Or Two)
rantonson17 says
Dear Author,
Thank your for your query. Unfortunately, I am unable to represent your work at this time.
Best of luck,
Rebekka
Jane Doherty says
Very unique voice. Please send the manuscript as an attached Word document.
Thanks,
Jane
Diana says
Dear Query #35:
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, this isn’t the right project for me.
Best wishes,
Diana
Anonymous says
Thank you for your interest in representation by Cold Day in Hell Literary Agency.
Please send the first three chapters and a synopsis.
best regards,
Agent for a Day Chris
comments: Bullying is an evergreen subject for teens. How kids work this out in the novel will be key.
TecZ aka Dalton C Teczon - Writer says
Dear Author:
Thank you for your query and for allowing me to consider your work.
While your novel, “Losers,” sounds exciting, I feel I’m not the right fit for your project. Therefore, I must decline on this project right now. But I do want to encourage you to continue submitting. Just because a project isn’t quite right for me, doesn’t mean the right agent isn’t just around the corner.
I wish you the best of luck with all your writing endeavors and in the querying and submission process. Persistence pays off, so don’t give up!
Best regards,
Dalton C. Teczon – Agent
Perle_Rare says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your recent query. Please send the first 50 pages of LOSERS pasted into your reply email. Do not send attachments.
Sincerely,
Perle_Rare
Reason:
– I’m intrigued.
H. Zilionis says
Dear Author,
Thank you so much for sending me your query and offering me the chance to consider your work. Unfortunately, I am not the right agent for your project.
Good luck and keep writing!
Holly Z – Agent for a Day
(This one was very close to requesting a partial for me. Unfortunately, the names threw me off (are they nicknames?) and I had trouble believing the event that would force them all together.)
Flemmily says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. Unfortunately, I feel that LOSERS is not a fit for our agency.
Best of luck with your future endeavors,
Flemmily
Maria A says
Dear Author
I’m intrigued by your query and interested in learning more.
Please send me the first three chapters of your manuscript.
Regards,
Agent
Davien says
Dear Author,
This is one of those letters I loathe to write as an agent, because you have a great hook.
However, I have concerns that the material might be above what I would want for a young adult market. The topic of murder and corrupt authority figures is too heavy for what I am seeking at this time.
This is a subjective analysis, however, and I encourage you to continue to submit. I have no doubt that you will find an appropriate market and representation, and I truly do wish you the best of luck.
Sincerely,
Dana says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately I am not interested in representing your novel.
Regards,
Dana
Reasons: Premise was really interesting, but I wanted more info. What did the cop do? Also, I don’t care why you wrote it and I’d like to see a stronger voice.
donnas says
Thank you for your submission. While your idea is intriguing it is not something I currently have the time to give the attention it deserves.
Best of Luck.
Lorin says
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting your query to me. I am very intriguied. Please email me your full ms.
Thank you,
Lorin
Rebecca Knight says
Dear “Losers” Author,
Thank you for your query, and for thinking of my agency. Unfortunately, I feel that I’m not the best fit for your project. This industry is highly subjective, so I’m sure others will feel differently. Best of luck to you in all your endeavors.
Sincerely,
Rebecca Knight
Janine says
Thank you for your query, but I am not the right agent for this. Best of luck.
Alisa says
No, thank you.
Alisa.
Vic K says
Thanks for your submission, but it isn’t right for me at this time.
Regards,
Vic K
Reason; There was a lot I liked about the premise but the plot didn’t hang together well enough for me.
Annie Reynolds says
Dear author
Thank you for taking the time to submit your query to the A.F.A.D. agency.
Let me start by telling you I did enjoy your query, your novel concept caught my interest. I did however find your query letter could benefit from additional polishing, and would be happy for you to resubmit your query at a later date.
Yours truly,
Annie Reynolds.
Getabo Publishing says
YOU MADE MY TOP 5!
*****
Thank you for your recent query. Your story DADI’S GAME appeals to me at various levels and I would like to read a partial of your work.
Please submit to me by email your first thirty pages or as close to this as possible at the end of a chapter or natural break.
Please remember to include your original query at the bottom of the e-mail.
I will respond with the outcome, whether requesting your manuscript in full or not, within thirty days.
Sincerely.
The Big Editor
Getabo Creative Publishing
Getabo Publishing says
Your story LOSERS – really DID make my top 5 – apologies for copy/paste typo.
(I can’t delete the comment, since it’s name/URL not a blogger ID.)
Cat Moleski says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. While the premise of your story is interesting, I would need to have more details of the plot before requesting more pages.
Cat
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I appreciate you sending in your work, but I don’t think its right for me.
Best of luck,
Keith Champaign
Aisling says
Dear Author,
I am sorry to inform you that I am not interested in your book. It does not fit with what I am looking for right now so I regret to tell you that, although I appreciated you sending me your query, I would not like to represent your work. I wish you the best of luck with your future writing!
Aisling
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I liked it. Send me more
Backdoor Trojan
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I’m sorry, but this story is not right for me. Thanks for sending me your request, I really appreciate it. Please continue writing.
Veronica Lovette
Mira says
Dear Author,
I sat on this for a couple of days because I really like your story.
I have no clue why some agents above think the fact that this has some similarities to the Breakfast Club is a negative. I think that very much increases it’s potential marketabliity.
I think this would appeal to both boys and girls, and tell an exciting story. I assume there is a romance, conflict, high school politics, etc., so all the elements are there.
I’m not requesting a partial because I’m guessing that this is not published. If I were an agent, I would, to see if your writing style holds up to the clear and smooth prose in your query.
I think you could have a fun, exciting marketable YA novel on your hands.
I wish you the very best!
Mira
Anonymous says
Dear writer,
I enjoyed your query, but I’m afraid I’m not the right agent to represent this work. I’d love to see more of your writing.
Gloria Valentine
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
This shows promise. Please send me a fifty-page partial.
Thank you!
AM
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I enjoyed your story and am interested in representing you. Please send me your full manuscript.
Thank you.
Sincerely,
Quintus Blackburn
Asherose says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your submission. I would like to request the first three chapters at this time. Thank you.
Agent
Reasoning: Good query structure. Would be even better with less personal information; agent not interested in how you came to write the book. However, intriguing storyline and well written blurb win out.
ccallicotte4 says
Thank you for sending me your query for BOOK TITLE. I appreciate you considering me.
I reviewed your proposal and unfortunately am going to pass on representing it, as I feel I would not be the best agent to represent your work. Your query is well written and I find the premise intriguing, but my list is full and I am having to be very selective in what I am taking on. Please keep in mind that this is a subjective business, and another agent may feel differently. I encourage you to query widely.
Best of luck to you,
[so close – I’m bummed to be limited to 5]
Anonymous says
please send manuscript.
Agent Edgar Leroy 3rd
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
Thank you for the submission, but I regret to inform you that I will not be picking up your story.
Keep Writing,
Agent Jackie Moon
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I am not interested in your novel. Keep writing, your story had potential but was not for me. Feel free to Query me later with another piece of your work.
Anonymous says
Dear author,
I found your story intriguing and I’d like to represent you. Please send me the first fifty pages and I’ll get back to you as soon as possible!
Thank you, Scarlett Cyrus
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I think that your story seems like it has publishing potential, and I would like to have the full manuscript.
Keep Writing,
Agent Jackie Moon
Dear Author, Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I am not the best representative for your work. Good luck in your search for representation. All the best, Agent LateInTheGame says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, I am not the best representative for your work.
Good luck in your search for representation.
All the best,
Agent LateInTheGame
drat says
Dear Author
I’d love to take a look – please forward me the full manuscript.
SDC
Gryph says
Dear Author,
Thank you very much for your query. I’m interested to see more! Please send me the first three chapters to blahblah at blahblah dot com. Either Microsoft Word format, OpenOffice format, or rich text would be fine.
Thank you very much for considering me!
Agent Gryph
(Tuna. I LOVE the name Tuna.)
Kate H says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Please send me the first 30 pages and a brief synopsis.
Kate H
Reba says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query. Unfortunately, it is not the right fit for me.
Best,
Reba
s.koncilja says
Dear Author,
I received and read your query. I like your voice. Please send more…
Agent S.K.
Shannon says
Dear Author,
Thank you for submitting your query for LOSERS for review. Unfortunately, I am not the right person to represent this story. This is a subjective business so another agent may feel differently. Good luck.
Sincerely,
Shannon
Anonymous says
Dear Author,
I regret to inform you that I am not interested in representing your story. I hope you have better luck in the future.
Best of luck,
Arkham
Dorothy says
Dear Author:
I regret I cannot accept your novel for representation. I did give it careful consideration and a second look. I think the premise is important and your decision to compress all the action to 24 hours ineresting. Keep me on your short list should you have another prject to pitch.
Sincerely
Honesty Is the Best Policy
superwench83 says
Dear Author,
Thank you for your query! I like the premise of your book. It sounds kind of like The Breakfast Club, which I love. Please email me your manuscript.
Sincerely,
Agent for a Day
(I would leave out the “I wrote this novel because” paragraph. I don’t think it’s necessary, personally.)