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Don’t step on your surprises

July 7, 2021 by Nathan Bransford 2 Comments

Crafting good mysteries is an important part of the novel writing process, no matter the genre. Mysteries pull the reader through the novel, they build anticipation and suspense, and they often result in the most satisfying payoffs for the reader.

I’ve written previously about the danger of being too vague as you’re crafting a mystery. The reader should understand the precise contours of the mystery, rather than being forced to piece together what is happening entirely.

But the flip side can also be problematic. I often see writers step on their surprises and just give everything away up front without mining the mystery for suspense. This is sort of like being a standup comedian who gives away the punchlines before you tell the joke.

Things like:

Nathan saw the robber and thought today was the day his precious lucky charm would finally be stolen. Little did he know that he would escape by the skin of his teeth in a most precarious fashion. [Scene where Nathan escapes the robber in a most precarious fashion]

The way to build anticipation isn’t by pre-selling the whole scene to the reader and telling them something exciting is about to happen. It’s better instead to craft a strong setup where the dynamics and stakes are very clear (Nathan is nervous because a robber wants his lucky charm at long last) and then let the scene unfold. Build anticipation for whether the protagonist will succeed or fail.

The reader will feel invested to see whether Nathan will escape. If we already know he escapes in the end, it’s just mechanics with no anticipation no matter how precarious the situation he finds himself in.

Remember my formula for a good mystery:

character’s desire and the consequences/stakes + obstacles/intrigue + delay = mystery

If you remove the delay and the intrigue, you don’t have yourself a good mystery.

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  1. Neil Larkins says

    July 7, 2021 at 4:58 pm

    I used to have the habit of leading my readers with statements like “Little did I know I was about to be surprised with a kiss.” And then describe how surprised I was when I was kissed. My writing improved when I stopped doing that.

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  2. Kathy Steinemann says

    July 15, 2021 at 10:38 am

    Thanks, Nathan.

    I recently read a book where a chapter ends something like “Little did I know she was already dead.” The sentence caught my attention, but it diluted the suspense of the following chapters.

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